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As Echoes Drift Onwards
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The echo drifts onward,
Of tales unforgotten,
Or perhaps memories,
Discarded as blindly as faith,
For who could have seen,
That the man beneath the mask,
Could be so cold,
And callous to cast,
Away his cherished dreams,

Where do we wander,
Under the midnight moon,
When all roads lead to dust,
And where do we soar,
When all our skies are crowded,
With other lights burning far brighter than our own,

Do we seek to ever float so high
Or are we simply clutching
at the threads of fate
Hoping that just once
We are not the ones who cut the lines,

For the roads of destiny are a tightrope
And each unsteady aching step,
Is merely one after another,
On a path fraught with failure below,

Is this why we soar?
So that when we fall
We know the pain of loss
Is as hard and cold as the ground.

For no matter who or what slips away,
When all else has left,
We still have our dreams,
Our whispers among the stars,
That shine bright in our eyes
Till our light finally dims,
And we leave this world,
Dreams and all.

Such is the nature of life,
We fly close enough to touch the stars,
So that we know how small and cold we truly are.
For no matter the brightness of our lives,
In death we are all the same as each other.
As cold and still as our dreams and lights are dark.

Yet the stars burn ever on,
And the echo drifts onward,
Of tales unforgotten,
Or perhaps memories,
Discarded as blindly as faith,
For who could have seen,
That the man beneath the mask,
Could be so cold,
And callous to cast,
Away his cherished dreams,

Just like you and me.
For someone with a colossal case of writer's block, my muse suddenly kicking into life tonight was a pleasant surprise.

Even if I'm not entirely sure what I've written.

I definitely like it, even if I'm not entirely certain of the formatting in certain places, I don't usually have my lines run into each other the same way they do here. It's also getting rather late so please excuse anything I say not making any sense whatsoever.

Apart from thanking my wonderful muse (who will no doubt probably go back to hiding in the corner and sulking for the next few months) I also have to thank the magnificent Yuki Kajiura, her music is what seemingly inspired this particular burst of inspiration. Specifically this track - [link] I do recommend listening to it as you read the poem.

This might be the least bleak poem I've ever written, or at the very least the least obviously bleak poem.

Please by all means, comment, share your feelings or understandings of this.

Update - 07/05/ 2012 -

It seems that upon rereading this, I've realised in retrospect the complex emotions that actually inspired this piece. Events that happened earlier in the year that absolutely crushed my ability to write in turn inspired this piece. I've been able to write properly again ever since. Odd, no?

Submitted to :iconbleedingheartspoetry: 'Closure' themed poetry contest.

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(C) to Caim-Seldal
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Philliewig Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Beautiful :) I'm glad you broke your writer's block. I see what you mean by this being a bleak poem...but I kinda see a glimmer of hope in the first line of the second to last stanza. Lovely work, I love this.
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AnImperfectDream Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I swear I say I've broken my writer's block in all of these at some point. Never seems to stay true unfortunately. XD

Though fortunately, I don't seem to be having any troubles at present.

Thanks so much for the comment. :heart:
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Philliewig Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You're so welcome :)
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TiaTitan Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the 'closure' contest.
I like your piece, I'm glad your muse came along to help ;D
I think it's interesting you found inspiration from a song, reading this I thought it read like lyrics, I liked it
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AnImperfectDream Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. =D

Yuki Kajiura's music seems to have a knack for nudging my muse awake from time to time, great to see the same piece felt as if it fitted my own.

I appreciated the comment, and I'm sorry I've taken so long to reply, had some laptop troubles recently. <3
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TiaTitan Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's cool. I hope your laptop's up and running again.
And music can work wonders sometimes ;)
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AnImperfectDream Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed it can, it seems to be my main motivator when I want to write something but can't quite figure out what.

My laptop seems to be in good health once more. As healthy as anything near me can be at least. XP
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LesserPandaBear Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I have mentioned this deviation in my journal - ([link]) Feel free to check it out! :3
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LesserPandaBear Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations! :D
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AnImperfectDream Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Congratulations to you as well, your piece is superb, it's tricky to work with rhyming poetry. =D
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